Literary Analysis- Ryan Glenzel
Ideas- These paragraphs need stronger evidence. The commentary’s could use more thought.
Organization- Conclusions could restate the Topic Sentence more thoughtfully.
Voice- More thought into the commentary’s could make the paragraphs flow better.
Word Choice- Most of the statements are clear. Needs more descriptive words to keep the reader interested.
Syntax- Needs to use transitions to make the flow better. It is choppy without them.
Conventions- Many spelling mistakes. Some grammer mistakes.
Presentation- The formatting is how Mrs. HC wants it.
Ryan gave me: Ideas 6. Organization 6. Voice 5. Word choise 5 Syntax 6. Conventions 5. Presentation 5.